New... New Query letter.

So I've written another query letter with the help of Lauren Spieller. She was quite the life saver. So now for your viewing pleasure. My NEW... NEW query letter.

Dear Agent,

When an ancient stone tablet detailing the origin of vampires is discovered, Sean Gryphon, an immortal from Atlantis with the ability to change shapes, is commanded to protect the Archaeologist who found it. Sean accepts these orders with all the grace of an elephant on roller-skates, but the ruling council of Atlanteans haven’t given him much choice: either protect Dr. Ilsy Hillerman and prove his worth to the Atlantean race… or die. 

Sean arrives at the home of Dr. Hillerman only to find it besieged by werewolf-alligator hybrids, known as wolfengators. Thinking fast, Sean whisks Ilsy away to his cabin where they plunge into the mysteries of the tablet and each other. They believe the worst is over after a few weeks of hiding. That is, until the original vampire, Lord Kek, sends his forces to reclaim the tablet and Ilsy.

Overpowered and desperate to save the woman he’s fallen in love with Sean sacrifices his own life to destroy Lord Kek’s forces and rescue Ilsy. Luckily, the Celtic Goddess Danu is impressed by his efforts and offers him the chance to return to Ilsy if he undertakes a quest to destroy her most dangerous foe: a mysterious immortal cloaked in shadows, the true power behind Lord Kek.

Complete at 85,000 words, RAGGED EDGE: CRY OF THE PHOENIX, is a supernatural thriller with series potential in the vein of THE DRESDEN FILES and SALEM’S LOT.

 

For the past ten years, I have worked as a paranormal investigator and have given lectures around the state of Kansas on the supernatural. I enjoyed applying my research throughout this novel.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

 

Agent Wishlist.

I've thought a lot about what I want from an agent and the type of person I want to work with. This is the list I have so far.

1. Not just an agent but also a Friend. This is pretty important, I'm not comfortable with a lot of people and I don't have a generally trusting personality. So I want an agent that I can trust and that will become a Friend as well.
2. Someone that believes in my writing perhaps even more than I do. I believe that I am definitely my own worst critic. I need an agent that will help balance that out and stop me from destroying my work by over tweaking.
3. Someone that communicates freely. I'm not known for my patience, so I want someone that understands that I want to know what's going on. Even if it's just updates that we are still waiting to hear back from an editor.
4. I'd like a smartass agent. I'm a smartass and I tend to get along better with people that share the same tendencies. I have a dry, sarcastic, sense of humor. I want someone that can appreciate that.
5. Someone that understands that I would gladly meet each and every one of my fans personally. The problems is, I hope to have enough fans that this will never be possible. I want an agent that will help me keep from burning myself out. 
6. Someone that understands that I have a limited concept of time. If I say I'll do something in a week, I might mean a month or a day or two. At the same time if I say something happened a few days ago, it might have been a couple months ago. This is just one of my weird quarks. If I'm reminded I will definitely get something done on time though.
7. Someone that understands that I'm not interested in flying first class. If I have a promotional opportunity I'm perfectly willing to fly coach to get there. Or if it's within a days or two drive I'm happy to drive there. Along with this I don't care about staying in five star hotels. If it's at least one step above a roach motel, I'm happy staying there.
8. I want someone that can critique my work in ways I understand and is willing to explain it if I don't. 
9. Most importantly. I want someone that understands, as much as I love my fans, I love my family more. 

 That's basically it. If I could find an agent that fits this bill I would be one happy writer.